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PostSubject: Euph's Creative Attempt   Fri Apr 08, 2011 8:54 am

Michael posted his story so I thought why not post what I've been working on. Just something for english class, I was given a picture and told to portray an important message within a creative piece so... It will probably come off as deep, depressing and pointless but I'm not usually like that Razz I got too carried away with it and it just got deeper and darker. Blah, blah. Any comments and opinions are welcomed Wink

I was working off a picture similar to this:

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PostSubject: Re: Euph's Creative Attempt   Fri Apr 08, 2011 1:26 pm

Hey Euph, got a chance to read your piece. I think to start off, this is such a refined piece of literature haha, the quality of the writing is much, much more developed and well written then mine where I focused on a general audience and yours came off as a more collegete style writing (which is great!).

I actually like when you are given a picture or a song or a sentence and you have to work with that to create a story, and I think the picture of the road surrounded by autumn leaves along the road creates a universe of scenarios and to be honest your story was very unqiue, something I haven't read before, nor considered writing. I think what I like the most is how you play with your words, like a sweet melody; it reminds me of Shakespear where he'll use one worded sentences, short chopped up ones, using description and uses a lot of breaks and expression. I don't think too many would at first understand the piece, nor the general idea, but I understood it pretty well (I hope I did). The trees, they're always isolated. They hang by the road watching time and life pass by and the change between nature and humans. Humans change and abandon the simplicity of nature and they are self-absorbed with city life and such... If only we could stop time and enjoy the purity of life and what it offers and maybe the world wouldn't be so hectic. And the isolation of the tree, they can't talk, they only watch, they don't have company nor can move and enjoy the earth but just sit contently along the paven road.

Dark? It's not as deeply depressing as other things, so don't worry about that edge, unless you were looking for that, in which case you could add the tree begging the human to stay instead of accepting they needed to leave.

Anyways, good piece Euph, very well written and I enjoyed it fully and it offered a different writers spin for me. And I hope you don't mind me taking that picture and rolling with it? Haha actually I had something in the works and it sorta corrolates to that picture. But anyways feel free to post more of your writing.

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PostSubject: Re: Euph's Creative Attempt   Fri Apr 08, 2011 3:14 pm

As always, I can count on you for an essay response. Smile I greatly appreciate the in-depth review and you do understand it, exactly what I was trying to convey. I thought it might just confuse. I didn't mean for it to be depressing at all Razz It just turned out like that I guess. It's probably the topic. I hadn't even thought of a message before writing it. I just took the picture, described the scene and rolled from there Razz

And yeah you can use that picture if you like, that's not the one I used, just something very similar.

Thanks a lot for the review Very Happy

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