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PostSubject: Guild Fanfic   Mon Jul 18, 2011 12:14 pm

First topic message reminder :

Pretty bored today with nothing to do, seeing Felipe's fic was also a good motivation. The idea just came to me this morning and everyone's characters just formed themselves. None of this was meant to be offensive towards anyone, just a bit of fun.

So. This here be a guild fanfic, you're all in it (the regulars) apart from Mac, sorry Razz I didn't think you'd want to be a Snorlax. I can always add you into the second chapter if there's enough interest. Those of you who didn't get much of the spotlight, that's just how it goes. Plenty space in future chapters if I can be bothered.

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Chapter One
2,518 words.
Thoughts in italics.
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Chapter Two
4,447 words.
Thoughts in italic

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I'll update the cast picture when I'm back on Sunday, I was able to finish this just in time to head to work.

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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Sun Jul 24, 2011 11:00 pm

I said 5000 was how much I WANTED to reach. In reality, Ch. 2 was somewhere around 6000. Razz
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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Sun Jul 24, 2011 11:30 pm

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I said 5000 was how much I WANTED to reach. In reality, Ch. 2 was somewhere around 6000. Razz

....Challenge accepted. I will surpass 6K next time around.

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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Mon Jul 25, 2011 1:54 am

You do realize that if a chapter is too long, it may not be able to hold the attention of the reader?
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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Mon Jul 25, 2011 4:52 am

"We took a table outside near a group of giggling girls. Of the three, the more attractive brunette gave me a wink. David pretended to ignore them, covering his face with the giant menu. I laughed at him. Normally, I was on the laughing end, but moments where he pretended not to care when really he did, was humorous."

Why am I ignoring these girls? o.O

Anyway, great continuance. Apart from the quote above, I don't think you were that harsh on my character Razz

You've kept the characters personalities. Hyper Ari, Know-it-all sid and there was a vague reference to road in there, a glint in his eyes as he disappeared with the eons. Mac's personality was brilliant, though hard to show so you'll excuse me if his inclusion in my future chapters are minimal. I noticed Felipe hasn't really commented on the story itself yet. You didn't include him!

I was impressed with the fine details that you took from my second chapter. Like the twin metal doors to the gym, forrest officiating, the mini-fridge gag and the receptionist. I did think you'd make a mistake, even a tiny one that only I'd notice but nope, everything was flawless. Speaking of things only I'd notice. Alina Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Mon Jul 25, 2011 1:09 pm

I have been a little too lenient recently. I've just been looking for an excuse to severely punish one of you. And now, I see that the pervert is in the spot that I should have had. Now unfortunately I cannot reach my full level of anger because I'm actually THRILLED not to be part of this pathetic non-gory mushy PG rated story. However, I've reviewed the shoutbox and realize the reason for my abscence in the story is apparently because I wasn't as good as the others.
My first thoughts were to react by performing the following deed:
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But then I got a better idea. I see there's a zombie contest coming up. I INVENTED ZOMBIES. So I will write a story that will blow your minds (no literally you all will get headshot). When I win, I'll have really made an impressionable mark, and I hope you'll never make the mistake of belittling me again. I will be the superior Mac!!!!
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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Mon Jul 25, 2011 9:21 pm

Thanks for the feedback BigMac and Euph.

I've been asked to write the fourth chapter so I will start working on that. I don't have an exact deadline but I shouldn't need more than friday to complete it. Expect 4k - 6k. Anyways yeah, just wanted to give everyone the heads up.

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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Fri Jul 29, 2011 6:50 pm

Chapter 4
3,535 words
MicahelN's Perspective


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Sorry guys for the short chapter but I have to take in my labtop tonight so I have to post what I have. This means that Euph will have to take care of my battling Misty and his own. I hope to have the computer back in time to write the next chapter. Again, sorry about the short chapter. I do hope you enjoy it though.

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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Fri Jul 29, 2011 10:48 pm

HA! Teach that kicking idiot to try to teach me! Get stung you karate reject! D:<

Anyhow, loved how I was portrayed. I'm bitter, annoyed, and don't take shit from anyone. Excellent.
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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Sat Jul 30, 2011 4:53 am

"David jumped in the bushes. " To which David are you referring o.O

Anyway, good progression, saw a few mistakes though, might want to check it over.
The Alina and Courtney part is to my liking Razz

Felipe was a bit cold eh Suspect Perhaps I'll come up with a reason for that

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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Sat Jul 30, 2011 5:06 am


You would have been much better off being a slowbro Razz

http://uk.gamespot.com/ds/rpg/pokemon-black/show_msgs.php?pid=989552&topic_id=m-1-58878168
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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Mon Nov 07, 2011 1:23 am

I have a re-post of Chapter 4 as I left it in an incomplete state. So I finished off my side of the story with claiming a second badge. Now Euph can continue with Chapter 5.

Chapter 4 (5307)

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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Fri Nov 11, 2011 10:03 am

I've not forgotten or lost interest Mikey. Probably won't be able to read it until sunday/monday though.

No idea when the fifth chapter will be out. I was actually thinking that now that we have two chapters each we could co-write this one. Throw some ideas together on msn, write a paragraph each and play about with the story until we're both happy with it. Something to consider.


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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Fri Nov 11, 2011 11:27 pm

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Blue Mac commented, while watching David rub his feet.

LOLno

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“Can I help you?” I turned to face the head headed Misty..

Does that mean she's bald? silent
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PostSubject: Re: Guild Fanfic   Tue Nov 15, 2011 6:04 pm

"“Oh my God! I can’t believe it’s Misty! This is awesome. I have so many questions I need you to ask her and… oh wow, I can’t… Michael it’s Misty!” Before I could even answer, Daisy lowered her flags and the battle resumed."

Heh, I had visions of her refusing to battle Misty and getting hammered.

Good work, one less gym match for me to cover now. Wink

I did notice a fair amount of mistakes though, give it a once over when you get the chance.

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